Talk:Permanent Alterations/@comment-6907100-20170507170756

It's not a bad pasta, but there are some loose ends that really would need to be patched up for it to make more sense. Like, why was Aftae not shiny? Why did they start doing the molding thing in the first place? It just seemed rather sudden and did not really seem to have much a purpose. Though it was a pretty good idea. I liked the detail at the beginning of the story explaining the family and how the household functioned...but I feel like there could have been just as much detail added into the "gameplay" sections.

All-in-all good work. I would give this pasta a solid 6/10