Talk:Pokemon Doomsday Diamond/@comment-4333377-20130408024649

Not bad, not bad. The biggest things: The grammar needs work, and you didn't act surprised when a Pokemon died. But then,you did know it was gonna be a creepy hack, so that's not as Surprising. Just tweak a few things, correct the grammar, and it'd be much better. I'm still finding errors in MY pastas even after 25+ checkings.