Talk:Pokemon Green Hidden Message/@comment-3400761-20130704000426

A decent pasta that had the possibiity to be better; don't get me wrong, you did well. Your idea was pretty original and an original idea is always to be prized, but it was let down a bit by the shortness of the pasta and the somewhat bad grammar that I spotted. For example, founded near the top. A Pokepasta is about getting lost in the work, and its hard for that to happen if a mistake jerks you out of it and back to reality.

I liked the hidden messages ideas as I have said above, but it was also a little short and a wee bit pointless. I mean, normal game, then glitches then haunted? What's the reason behind us, why is it creepy and not just unusual? I get that you tried to bring in the whole making Pokemon sad as an explination but that needs a bit more set up. Show us they were sad in the earlier story, make us believe that they could actually do this. Don't just have some random guy run up and tell you.

Flaws aside, it was a fairly good pasta and well worth its place in the wiki. I hope to see more pasta sfrom you in the future.